“Someone told me that shoes over a wire like this, signifies drugs for sale nearby.
That may or may not be true. But you could use it for anything.” Sunday Photo Fictioneer, Al
There was the signal she hoped she’d never see. Grinning at her. Rocking gently in the wind as if walking to the sky.
But green shoes with orange laces on the highest message line had only one meaning. Her whole body involuntarily shivered. A river of cold sweat soaked the neckline of her sweater.
The others would be an ant-like marching line. Purpose embedded spirit-deep. Drones in a work-trance of industriousness.
She had her own drone-job. To fling high onto the message line coded instructions hidden in the colors of the shoes and laces.
She felt tired. Incapable. Wanting the bliss of sleep. The comfort of not knowing that green shoes with orange laces hung from the message line.
So boldly, so clearly spelling revolution. Initiating chaos.
She took one last look at a serene world, and threw her first pair of shoes: indigo blue with deep violet laces.
The war, the revolution had begun.
{with circa 45 words left to be used – can I carry them over, lol}
Builds the tension well.
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Thanks — I like stories that have a tension (real or imagined; obvious or subtle.
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I’ll let you carry them over hehe.
Great story. Sounds like it could be the start of something 🙂
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Thanks. I wasn’t thinking of this as a beginning, but it might be — now, what comes next, lol?
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I look forward to your next story 🙂
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And, I look forward to your next picture!
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🙂
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We both went dark – you before, me after. Loved this!
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Thanks!
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Sounds like Chapter One of a good book. Enjoyed! BTW thanks for the idea of squirreling away words…lol
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You are more than welcome re squirreling away words!
And thanks for seeing a chapter one! Hopefully, there is a chapter two, lol.
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aloha Shape Shifter. i like the idea of message lines and coded messages. fun. aloha.
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Gives the retro feel of decoder rings, and non-tech ways of communicating!
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it does. fun. I thought about that (slightly) in my write as well. fun fun. aloha
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A dark story for dark times. A Nike spring.
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Darkness seems the way of the world these days!
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AnElephant is not a person but he finds this intriguing.
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